Ungreatful
He goes to a school,
to get educated for
a brighter future.
But he does not pay
attention in class as his
teachers attempt to
share their knowledge,
letting it pass through
his head.
He has a computer,
for research, writing,
notes and studying.
But he procrastinates,
by playing games,
listening to music,
and watching videos,
for his entertainment.
He has opportunities
he uses as a break.
And a tool that
he uses as a toy.
How can one take
such things for granted?
Jack- Your poem ends with a powerful parallel pair of observations- opportunities/break & tool/toy. These show that sense of waste and guilt, and all of us know that feeling. You've taken advantage terse, short lines to suggest a restrained scolding. I'm less sure about the last line. The 'one' there seems revealing in it's (failed) attempt to distance. What if it was 'we'? Or, how else might you end it? The idea works, but I'd play a bit w/ the language, perhaps.
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